Re: ice on the window

'thorsten taylor' wrote:
>ice on the window
>
>five geese fold into a W,
>slip back into a V

i don't disagree with the image you're trying to make here, but i do beleive
'W' is much too bulky of a word, when put in comparison with the rest of the
poem's simple words.

>
>the clouds foam upward,
>Mount Rushmore for a moment
>
>at the halfway point,
>the train stops
>
>the ground now silent
>as the sky
>



-i : a.i.=n_